Naruto WIP

[Jason Robinson]

Naruto about to put a beatdown on some poor dope. More to come...

[Nick Pitarra]

I like this a lot. Theres alot of energy and character in the upper body, the hand, the face, the arms....really nice stuff. Your moving the shapes of the body around really well. However you loose a lot of that energy in the lower body, mainly b/c neither of your lower limbs are following the flow of the spine(the action line), your legs are taking off sharply and hiding behind your figure,therefor causing you to lose out on a lot of the energy in the silouhette. And the left leg looks too contourted,or visually...it's a strange angle to pull off. This is really nice work with a lot of movement...I'll do a quick over doodle to show you what the hell I'm talking about...



Leaving your upper body alone, I just lined your right thigh up with the curve of the action line(established by the spine). Then I tried a handful of different takes on the left leg, used as a counterweight. I like the black version best, only it breaks the rule of not having both the limbs being bent in the same postion, but the character outline works well enough to make up for it. Then I did one with the upper body infront of the punch,like your orginal version. Then one with his leg kicked out at us. Sorry these suck, I only have a mouse and the ball sticks. Anyways....hope this helps. Really cool sketch and your version does have a shit load of energy in it,a lot more than my sketches over it...only its tough with that left leg disapearing.

~nick

[Jason Robinson]

Hey, Nick... Thanks a lot for taking the time to critique and do a "draw-over" of my sketch. Your points are well taken... the trickiest thing was trying to figure out exactly how I wanted Naruto's legs to go, and still keep that "caution to the wind" feeling of him throwing himself at his opponent without thinking.

In my mind's eye, I envisioned his hips being thrust closest to the viewer, with his legs hanging behind him, kinda like he's in freefall as he pulls his arm back to strike. But, as you pointed out, the left leg being hidden behind his body (and my poor perspective in drawing it) makes it look kind of weird... almost as if he's got a stump.

I'll definitely keep your suggestions in mind as I go forward. It'll likely end up somewhere between my sketch and the black line version you worked up.

Thanks again... I appreciate the input!

[Jason Robinson]

Slight revisions on the Naruto sketch, along with a sketch of his opponent. Still in progress...

[MBirkhofer]

There's a disconnect between his torso and legs for Naruto.


Nick's overpaint was bringing the legs forward to match his torso and where his pelvis should be.
If you want to keep the legs back, all out falling forward, you need to push his hips and pelvis way back.

I'll try to do a sketch in a sec.

[Nick Pitarra]

Looking good man. And like birkhofer said...to sell the angle of the legs, the way the hips currently connect to the torso would have to be bent more. And...then you'd have to put his neck on that same line of action as well,which would tilt his head back(which would make him look like he's going really all out). So the neck, back(torso), hips, legs all follow the same curve. Right now the neck,back,and hips line up. Either way...in the grand scheme of things these are looking great and the edits are pretty nitpicky,I'd just move on to the next drawings b/c the tweak to the left leg did help out tremendously. You've got a great cartoony style that I dig. Keep up the excellent work.

~nick

[Jason Robinson]

Yeah... I'm still working on it. Artwork to date... still mulling some things over. Suggestions welcome, of course.

[The Ronin Blade]

I'm loving the Goku, I've been desperately trying to draw a realistic goku and ..well..the results are rather bad.

Liking the Naruto as well although I'm not familiar with him. Goku should fuck him up though, I mean come on, the dude beat being dead for heavens sake.

[Jason Robinson]

Yeah... that's pretty much why Goku has that smirk on his face: he knows the world of pain he's about to expose poor Naruto to. Of course, he won't try to kill him or hurt him TOO much. He just wants to motivate Naruto to get even STRONGER, so he'll be an even tougher opponent to fight in the future.

...yeah, it's not like I've worked out a whole storyline in my head or anything...