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Postby Gravence » Thu Sep 04, 2003 7:08 am

Hey this is one simple question anyone can reply to... Does this drawing look like the girl? Be honest she's seeing it today and my eyes are so use to the image by now I can't tell. Thank you....please reply(on knees).

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Postby WhoIsRico » Thu Sep 04, 2003 7:16 am

i think it's a decent likeness. her eyes look a bit more slanty in your drawing than in the photo.
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Postby Sweeney » Thu Sep 04, 2003 7:46 am

The face is a good likeness, but as WIR said the eyes are a bit off - the need to be a bit taller, and slightly more rounded.

The hands are really flat - they need shadows to bump up the foreshortening, especially her left (our right) hand, otherwise her fingers look way too short, like a birth defect. Add dark shadows at the knuckles where they bend (check out the photo and you'll see what I mean.

Also, you're missing the Engagement/Wedding Ring on her left (our right) hand.

Good job overall!
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Postby Laura » Thu Sep 04, 2003 8:00 am

Yeah, what they said. I also wouldn't recommend the dark shadow down the length of her left forearm. In the photo, the arm is highlit all the way down, but with the way it's shaded in the drawing, it looks like she's got two arm-muscles instead of one smooth cylindrical shape.

Otherwise, it's good.

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Postby Gravence » Thu Sep 04, 2003 8:06 am

THANKYOU!!!!! I knew it had something to do with her eye...I blame it on my mind trying to draw what I am used to but not what is correct... my brain feels fried. I wish my eyes wouldn't feel so tired... thanks for lending your eyes to a friend.
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Postby Scott Johnson » Thu Sep 04, 2003 8:10 am

If you really want nitpicking...you made the back of her neck too thick behind the jawbone.

And you forgot all the stains on her shirt. :) Good likeness, though.
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Postby Gravence » Thu Sep 04, 2003 8:19 am

she told me not to draw the stains I kinda like them adds character. Trying to fix the neck right now...
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Postby tedbragg » Thu Sep 04, 2003 9:01 am

T-shirt Trivia:

"H-E-B" = Hurst - Euless - Bedford

Three cloes-knit towns sandwiched between Ft. Worth and Dallas.
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Postby chadf » Thu Sep 04, 2003 9:07 am

Everyone's pretty much said what needs to be done.
I just wanted to compliment you on the shading on her face.

Very well done!
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Postby Gravence » Thu Sep 04, 2003 10:18 am

First off, THANK YOU!!!

Wow, you guys really help a guy in need your hints and suggestions were all very helpful and I tried to apply them to the drawing. Here she is, drawn to the best of my ability except for the rings and part of the name tag. Those few remainders I will finish at work. Once again...THANK YOU!!!

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Postby Laura » Thu Sep 04, 2003 11:33 am

Nice job, Gravence!

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Postby Rigger » Thu Sep 11, 2003 12:03 pm

Nice

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Postby danimation » Fri Sep 12, 2003 8:27 am

What about the stains on the shirt?
Blah.... blah blah, blah dollar.
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Postby Gravence » Mon Sep 15, 2003 7:36 am

Thanks guys!!! My heart jumped when I read the last couple of messages. If anyone cares recently I have been feeling burnt out and depressed about, how and where I was going with art. I've been trying so hard to improve that I really can't see the good in my drawings and so my drawings have been suffering from the lack of motivation. When I showed everyone at work this drawing they all looked at me like "Wow, this kid has talent." True the compliments are from untrained eyes but my heart was lifted even higher. They asked me what I was doing there and why I wasn't persuing a career. I told them I wasn't ready and they looked at me kinda wierd, but I'm not ready I know that for a fact...anyways If anyone is feeling down try showing off your art it's really an awesome stress reliver. Another thing is they called my talent a "gift" If only they knew how hard I try then they would probably call it a curse...naw I just think the "gift" is the passion you have meeting the physical requirements needed...well thats what I figured. What do you think?
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Postby Scott Johnson » Mon Sep 15, 2003 7:52 am

A lot of people think art skill is some natural magical in-born talent. They don't think of it something you have to work your ass off to get good at, which is sad. If they only knew how hard it really was. :roll:
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