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Re: From Video Games to Comics

Postby balooga » Sun Aug 30, 2009 9:13 am

When I first saw these pages, I thought everything looked perfect, but looking at them again, one thing I would possibly change is the first panel of the second page -- flipping the image would help the storytelling flow a little better, IMHO.

Again, beautiful work.

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Re: From Video Games to Comics

Postby John Rauch » Sun Aug 30, 2009 10:46 am

The flipping actually hurt the story telling. Draw out the line your eye would follow and I think you'll see why it worked better before.
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Re: From Video Games to Comics

Postby boysoltero » Sun Aug 30, 2009 10:49 am

I think the pages look great! Looking forward to see more of your stuff!\m/
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Re: From Video Games to Comics

Postby floodgate » Sun Aug 30, 2009 11:06 am

Zombie Dave McCaig wrote:I agree with John.


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Re: From Video Games to Comics

Postby balooga » Sun Aug 30, 2009 12:35 pm

John Rauch wrote:The flipping actually hurt the story telling. Draw out the line your eye would follow and I think you'll see why it worked better before.


I stand by my opinion.

To quote Klaus Janson from The DC Comics Guide To Pencilling Comics: "The ability to change the direction of a moving object relies on the introduction of the neutral panel."

The fact that the army is moving from right to left in panel one, and then abruptly switches to left to right in the next without the neutral panel, is a little jarring.
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Re: From Video Games to Comics

Postby Zombie Dave McCaig » Sun Aug 30, 2009 12:42 pm

Yeah, but you're ignoring the soldier's head. That's all that was needed to keep the line in place. I get the impression of a winding path in the original version, yours is just a straight line.
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Re: From Video Games to Comics

Postby balooga » Sun Aug 30, 2009 2:12 pm

Zombie Dave McCaig wrote:Yeah, but you're ignoring the soldier's head. That's all that was needed to keep the line in place. I get the impression of a winding path in the original version, yours is just a straight line.


Oops, didn't pay much attention to his head -- Yeah, that makes perfect sense now.

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