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Crit fodder!

Postby ColorNaif » Fri Aug 07, 2009 1:31 am

I posted some pin-up stuff months ago and got some nice comments and very helpful crits, so I figured I'd try some seqs I'm working on at the moment. In a nutshell, what do you think I'm doing right, and what do you think just isn't working? You can be nuanced, too, if you have the time. :P For a long time I've focused on stuff like rendering and learning to flat quickly, but now I'm trying to think more about colour composition and avoiding focus-stealing BGs like the ones in the second page here. :?

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Re: Crit fodder!

Postby Chriss Cornish » Fri Aug 14, 2009 10:59 pm

I like the colors and textures. You got a great purple glow on the phasing kid-crook exiting the bank and I love the purple & gold effect you did in that long panel where the heroine's chasing him.

My one feedback is that there's something odd about the roof in the first panel; I feel like the roof is tilted at a different angle than the rest of the picture. I think the disorientation I'm feeling is a result of how bright the far roof surface is and how sharp the parapet shadows are; makes that 'wall' feel like it's very short, but that impression I'm getting is countered by how high it comes up to the heroine's knee in the foreground. Making that portion of the roof less bright fixes the angle distortion I'm feeling in that first panel. I did a quick overpaint on the roof with a watercolor brush to show what I mean (the original is below it for quick reference).

Hope that's helpful; looking forward to seeing more. :)
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Re: Crit fodder!

Postby ColorNaif » Sat Aug 15, 2009 8:31 am

Thanks, Chris! I agree about the roof, especially concerning the texture. All of those details (including the shadows) are probably too pronounced, so I'll tone them down a bit. Here's some more pages from various books:

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I'm especially curious to get some professional input about the cell-shaded pages, since this book is my first experience with this sort of work. I've just been looking at what others have done in books ranging from Dave's (freaking amazing) work in The Spirit (seriously, this could be my favourite comic book coloring ever) to the Cartoon Network stuff DC puts out and soaking up whatever I can.

Sock it to ME! Take a jackhammer to these babies!
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Re: Crit fodder!

Postby Nick Filardi » Sat Aug 15, 2009 12:16 pm

hey- is that chad thomas' work on the first series of pages? The flying girl and the phase guy?
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Re: Crit fodder!

Postby ColorNaif » Sat Aug 15, 2009 10:56 pm

Swing and a miss! That's John Amor, whose stuff I really like a lot. I'll definitely check out Chad's work, and if it's anything like John's, then he's got himself a new fan! :rawk:
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Re: Crit fodder!

Postby Nick Filardi » Sun Aug 16, 2009 12:39 pm

wow. that is uncanny. Chad even does the same kind thing with perspective. Here is some of chad's work.

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